fentopal

Hey man, I'm back on here. See Journal for news. And I DO have your pilot, and I DID read it. And I DO have an ongoing TODO item in Outlook to write you about it. But it's been crazy.

You still interested in any feedback?

Cool, then I will wait to see what comes when you get the re-write done.

Also, I would encourage you to look at the Firefly pilot. Whether you like the show or not, it is a pretty stunning example of striking the balance between introduction and story movement. I think it is 2 hours, but man, it got me hooked on that show!