tedbedlam

First let me say that coming from a layman, all of my comments may be worthless. I think it was shot very well, very clean and smooth transitions. The audio synced seamlessly so I can't see any technical problems with it. The real problem with it are the performances of the two sub-humans that keep babbling in every scene.

Since you are a talented writer, can I assume you didn't write the script?

"Here we pay honor... to the medal of honor." Wow. The delivery made it worse.

All in all I would say usable in your portfolio. From a tech aspect it is well shot and edited. The rest of it I would say you had no control over. Good work.