summerbrat

So ok I was writing the other night and came up with this Poem. I would really like everyones input please.

He comes for me in the late of night,
In The Darkness.
He tempts me with the promises of granting my desires.
And tangles a web of lies in my lustful mind.
He waits for me to embrace him,
In The Darkness.
His deep dark laughter pierces my soul.
His words twist around in my consiencs.
And leaves me pleading lustfully,
In The Darkness.
His intensely dark eyes make me quiver.
As they graze slowly over my body.
With wild intetions of ravashing me,
In The Darkness.
As he breaths his firery hot breath on my neck.
He slowly slips back to his domain.
Leaving me pleading for more,
In The Darkness. Summer


So um yeah let me know