so tahoe turned out to be pretty lame... everyone got drunk except me and the girl i went with. i sat at a table alone for 4 hours and wrote the rest of my script for my short film i am making. it should be fun to make, and turn a few heads.
if the local chapter of the film group likes it i will be entered into a national competition. i have seen some of my competitors and if i can pull this off the way i want then i should have no problem getting into the national comp.
its a 3 minute short with the theme "Tough Love." We can interpret it anyway we want. mine is the story of one night for a woman. it is a quick display of power transfers from one person to the next. how we feed off of other peoples energy to keep ourselves alive.
Here is the rough draft summary of the first scene... give me feedback, and remember its my first film.
Girl on Top: Tough Love
Scene 1: Angry Tears
Camera sweeps across a dark room, details are faint but dolls and knickknacks suggestive of a small girl are present. A corset, stockings, and other sexually suggestive clothes are strewn across the floor. A male body is asleep in the bed, and comfortable in form. A female can be heard sobbing in the background, the sounds are echoed, and coming from the bathroom which is revealed as the camera continues to sweep. The bathroom is dimly light with a hint of blue light. The womans face is present in the mirror as the camera approaches her. She is naked and bruises can be seen on her back and sides. The camera continues closer and reveals smeared makeup, tears running off her face. Her tears and weeping turn to anger and frustration and she wipes her face clear of the tears. She starts the shower and the camera follows the steam to the ceiling. Fade to black.
A black dress is picked up by a womans hand. Camera follows the dress as it is draped onto her body from head to toe. The woman then applies her makeup and puts on high heels. She has to sneak past her partner who is still fast asleep. We see her exit the room and immediately the shot goes to her entering a new room, a coffee shop.
if the local chapter of the film group likes it i will be entered into a national competition. i have seen some of my competitors and if i can pull this off the way i want then i should have no problem getting into the national comp.
its a 3 minute short with the theme "Tough Love." We can interpret it anyway we want. mine is the story of one night for a woman. it is a quick display of power transfers from one person to the next. how we feed off of other peoples energy to keep ourselves alive.
Here is the rough draft summary of the first scene... give me feedback, and remember its my first film.
Girl on Top: Tough Love
Scene 1: Angry Tears
Camera sweeps across a dark room, details are faint but dolls and knickknacks suggestive of a small girl are present. A corset, stockings, and other sexually suggestive clothes are strewn across the floor. A male body is asleep in the bed, and comfortable in form. A female can be heard sobbing in the background, the sounds are echoed, and coming from the bathroom which is revealed as the camera continues to sweep. The bathroom is dimly light with a hint of blue light. The womans face is present in the mirror as the camera approaches her. She is naked and bruises can be seen on her back and sides. The camera continues closer and reveals smeared makeup, tears running off her face. Her tears and weeping turn to anger and frustration and she wipes her face clear of the tears. She starts the shower and the camera follows the steam to the ceiling. Fade to black.
A black dress is picked up by a womans hand. Camera follows the dress as it is draped onto her body from head to toe. The woman then applies her makeup and puts on high heels. She has to sneak past her partner who is still fast asleep. We see her exit the room and immediately the shot goes to her entering a new room, a coffee shop.
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anyway. I really like what you have written so far. I've been starting to read a little about screenwriting and stuff, so it's interesting seeing the types of things others come up with. The visuals are all there in your words-- which is peachy. I'd love to read the rest of it when you get it finished.
By then, perhaps I'll have something to share with you *wink*