Alright, here's that poem I wrote the other day. Enjoy:
I burn for you,
all but entirely,
so much so that my vision
narrows to only encompass your form,
and my mind's only logic
exists within your aspect.
That my blood boils to
know your every curve
That these hands ache,
smolder
for want to know your skin.
No drink can quench this longing,
For every sip simply fuels it more
blisters me deeper,
to this feverish pitch.
My heart,
this smoking ember,
can only know peace within your arms,
and this fire,
can only be extinguished
in the cool satisfaction of your embrace.
I think it needs a little reworking...
your thoughts?
I burn for you,
all but entirely,
so much so that my vision
narrows to only encompass your form,
and my mind's only logic
exists within your aspect.
That my blood boils to
know your every curve
That these hands ache,
smolder
for want to know your skin.
No drink can quench this longing,
For every sip simply fuels it more
blisters me deeper,
to this feverish pitch.
My heart,
this smoking ember,
can only know peace within your arms,
and this fire,
can only be extinguished
in the cool satisfaction of your embrace.
I think it needs a little reworking...
your thoughts?
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