Thursday Oct 20, 2005

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I was feeling (purple) kind of unproductive today, so I made an add and posted it on craiglist today. Go check it out here and tell me what you think. Honestly, please. I need feedback.

And I still want to know what you want to be when you grow up if you haven't told me yet.

Btw, sg members get a friend price=basically cost
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michelle:
what are the differences in your dream? you're a boy for reals and it's reoccuring... what else?
tsukue:
I'd say add more spacing to the ad - just to make it stand out more. And use fewer words. The gist should come across in the first sentence. Then a line break. And then launch into pricing & jobs. Then another line break. And then something about you. Line break and then your contact info. I figure you can switch them around as you see fit but really spacing and short sentences do wonders! Good luck!

I think I want to be a pastry chef and/or a gardener when I get a bit older. Me - grow up - what? biggrin

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