Ok, this is a little piece of shit that i wrote about a year or two ago (can't remember), during a period of complete obsession, and utter mental break down, hence why its a piece of shit, well, i'll let you be the judge.
He wasnt entirely sure how long he had been floating (where)here, days, months, years millennia time is/was a fleeting thing and wholly without meaning. There (is)was the (present?) the (where)here and (when)now, (here)where he had done(seen) many things (visions?) floating (where)here in the darkness, how had the old sage put it the (when)future, the (when)past, old friends long gone(although he had few of those)
He had (seen)gone through (visions?) his development (again?) into the man he (had become)became, his early formative years, his mother, his father (no bitterness or sarcasm intended). He (had became)became a hero (again?) in countless battles, with many hard fought victories, and a few bloody defeats, and the dead mounted. Then (where)here (was)is the parade thrown in his honor (again?) the crowd lines the street, they (cheered)cheer his name and he (remembers?) (feeling)feels total apathy toward them. He (was)is just doing his job their (hate)love matters nothing to him he (knew)knows his destiny and (cared)cares not.
(Here)Where was he? Well (where)here, yes, but thats not what he meant drifting, yes, drifting (where)here (Here)Where was he? Well (where)here yes, but no hed been over that as he had so many times yes time that was of the essence in the (where)here and (when)now. But time had never mattered (since)before so why choose (when)now? Why this particular point in time (present, past, future?) Yes, point in time now suddenly things were coming together.
He knew exactly where and when, here was, he was at the point in time where all things meet, future, became the present, became the past, and so on but this place was more, so much more. He had experienced visions yes, but he had also experienced the visions; this place had that power, for this was the Lifestream, the very essence of the planet. It was preparing him as it had before, and would again, for that was his destiny, to play in his role in protecting Mother Earth. There that spark, I sense the danger, time to go he stretched his limbs, and gathered his strength. Then he stretched his one wing outward and in the blackness it covered nothing, but soon it would cover the world but this time with what? His part was not yet written but whatever his destiny, he would care not, for each man must play his part.
Alright, so its a piece on sephiroth, but i did not choose him lightly, there is a reason, this is not some dork piece. but its still in my opinion a piece of shit, however, i only say that because i am extordinarily critical of all things i create. it may or may not be a piece of shit i only ask for an honest opinion
Thanx.
He wasnt entirely sure how long he had been floating (where)here, days, months, years millennia time is/was a fleeting thing and wholly without meaning. There (is)was the (present?) the (where)here and (when)now, (here)where he had done(seen) many things (visions?) floating (where)here in the darkness, how had the old sage put it the (when)future, the (when)past, old friends long gone(although he had few of those)
He had (seen)gone through (visions?) his development (again?) into the man he (had become)became, his early formative years, his mother, his father (no bitterness or sarcasm intended). He (had became)became a hero (again?) in countless battles, with many hard fought victories, and a few bloody defeats, and the dead mounted. Then (where)here (was)is the parade thrown in his honor (again?) the crowd lines the street, they (cheered)cheer his name and he (remembers?) (feeling)feels total apathy toward them. He (was)is just doing his job their (hate)love matters nothing to him he (knew)knows his destiny and (cared)cares not.
(Here)Where was he? Well (where)here, yes, but thats not what he meant drifting, yes, drifting (where)here (Here)Where was he? Well (where)here yes, but no hed been over that as he had so many times yes time that was of the essence in the (where)here and (when)now. But time had never mattered (since)before so why choose (when)now? Why this particular point in time (present, past, future?) Yes, point in time now suddenly things were coming together.
He knew exactly where and when, here was, he was at the point in time where all things meet, future, became the present, became the past, and so on but this place was more, so much more. He had experienced visions yes, but he had also experienced the visions; this place had that power, for this was the Lifestream, the very essence of the planet. It was preparing him as it had before, and would again, for that was his destiny, to play in his role in protecting Mother Earth. There that spark, I sense the danger, time to go he stretched his limbs, and gathered his strength. Then he stretched his one wing outward and in the blackness it covered nothing, but soon it would cover the world but this time with what? His part was not yet written but whatever his destiny, he would care not, for each man must play his part.
Alright, so its a piece on sephiroth, but i did not choose him lightly, there is a reason, this is not some dork piece. but its still in my opinion a piece of shit, however, i only say that because i am extordinarily critical of all things i create. it may or may not be a piece of shit i only ask for an honest opinion
Thanx.
h.s.