This could be anyone right now.
as i pull at your hair and your teeth just break the surface.
Feeling you tear and thrash beneath me, then relax... a bitter moan escaping my lips as blood pours from my chest.
I don't want you.
I don't need to feel this tonight.
all the agony stops for a second, as I sit in your bathroom and let you bandage me,
it's almost over you say, a smile begging on your lips.
And when you turn away i'll be half way to the door,
just seconds before you work up the courage to say I love you and another minute untill you start to cry.
as i pull at your hair and your teeth just break the surface.
Feeling you tear and thrash beneath me, then relax... a bitter moan escaping my lips as blood pours from my chest.
I don't want you.
I don't need to feel this tonight.
all the agony stops for a second, as I sit in your bathroom and let you bandage me,
it's almost over you say, a smile begging on your lips.
And when you turn away i'll be half way to the door,
just seconds before you work up the courage to say I love you and another minute untill you start to cry.
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any input is valuable input
you take what you think is useful and move on
no hard feelings
i dont see much commenting on the Poetry Kicks Ass board
thats what i was saying
and you need comments
i was just saying the other night that I cant believe Stephen King doesnt take any comments/help on his books anymore- thats what i hear i dont read him that much
apparently SK is so powerful he is his own editor and the publishing house just does whatever for him and he gets no feedback
i wouldnt even wanna write something with no feedback
feedback is why i write
i know people who say they write for themselves
but
i think if you like to write and you like your work you should wanna show it off and get some feedback have it make some sort of impression
i guess maybe its like you dont really know what your own voice sounds like because you filter it through you head and water in years ears and etc etc
so you gotta have someone else describe your voice sometimes
to get a better understanding of it
shit
im rambling
heres a poem
end me one
Kids on Bikes
Tonights show is a benefit
for
f
a
l
l
i
n
g.
My skin r a t t l e s
and the music bends
telephone poles.
She smiles
seeing
her favorite
superhero prancing
about on the stage and
bleeding.
She paid
and that's more than most.