dankrubis

Right on..I'll add you to the SG clan folder

i like the story in your journal
a sparse confrontational feel
with a little bit of tension

i think it read fine until the end when he said "you want our kids to grow up without a mother figure.."

i dont think its completely out of her character to blow it off
but a question that big would seem to start something - especially after he mentioned he felt a fight coming on
anway
it wasnt bad
just doenst immediatley flow for me

as for my interview thread in the group
the thread about me in the writers group was pumpkinhead's idea
he used to do them - apparently - just to kinda interview people he wanted
and he asked me
and i said yes

and i wanna keep it going
after he finishes interviewing me
i will pick somebody and ill interview thm
then that person will pick somebody
and interview them

and well get to know each other
and more about each other

and
for the virgin thing
i am damn attractive thank you
and i think fundamentalists christians get it on
with other fundamentalist christians
i
have been waing to fall in love
or at least a little bit of love
and the girls who wanted to sleep with me i turned down
and some of the girls i would have like to make love to - i never got the chance
so
im thinking about giving up and love and letting new orleans and strippers and gambling corrupt me
get some real vices
like the storied old writers

i think it was bukowski who didnt lose his virginity until 26
and he became a huge drunken womanizer after tha

so i have plenty o time

watch it there, skinny pete... this is how my last romantic relationship started.

you know how it goes...

i guessed she was masturbating based on the lag time between instant messages, one thing lead to another...

christ, i'd like to avoid that again.

i'm working tonight, so i'll get to your play tomorrow.

and, i'm not even sure(vis a vie said relationship) that we're through with each other yet. which just makes the crazy even worse in me.

and as for the bourbon.

i've got jim beam black.

god, how much more amazing could i get? i'm the fucking man.

so when am I visiting? I do not know...

how about as soon as I score some buds? That should be reasonably soon. I will have to come back to read the story - at a work thing and cheating to write this to you... cannot push my luck too much.

I miss you. And your white russians. Thanks for the comment.. sorry, I do not plan on writing unless it is journalism, know what I mean? not to worry.

much love,
~ kelly angel*

so submit it to sg for group aproval, my guess is they won't approve it based on the argument that there is already two groups just for writers and a third for poetry. you'd have to convince them that nobody really contributes anything, that there's too many lurkers and not only does it warrent another group, but it should be private and require some bizarre admission process.

"that rug really tied the room together"

i wanna see your barn exercise when its done
i think im gonna try it myself
sounds interesting

people have a read hard time reading that many pages from a screen. in general, even two pages get people wondering if they're not really enganging. everything long i've ever posted has gotten lost in the shuffle. even people who always read my stuff online and off haven't read anything i've put up over three pages. i'm not saying don't but post it, but i am saying don't confuse the response with it being bad, it might just be too long.

Ah, you are such a tease!
I thought you weren't able to update anytime soon.

I dare you to fuck off your teacher....



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i find the Fuck Off approach quite satisfying
in the short term
and less smart in the long run

i usually opted for the turn crap in on time
and see if i can improve the crap later

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"in like flynn"...

the New Romance is now the former New Romance.

and i don't know about permantly.

but between her and this here liter of eight year old jim beam.

yeah.

fucked up

thanks for the comments on my latest story

i dont like the whole - we need the bad - stuff either, but thats how it came out

all these stories in that thread ive just picked a lyric, sat down and cranked em out and not revised or reread or anything
so
i dont really like any of them
they have potential

like this swear word one
with the crime in willys factory
i think i could make something out of it

but youre right
the bad is necessary thing is so played out
i gotta go back and revise the fuck out of it

thanks for the facts (of life) man

everything is a cliche, it can be done well, but its got be spectacular. i was more annoyed that Ian came off as though he was just a prick, just trying to get laid and picked the easiest target.

meanwhile, i finally found a way of writing dialouge that makes me really happy and posting it on the internet fucks the formating all to hell, ruining the effect. brilliant.

screenplay ideas come like rain... when it rains it pours...

so write them ALL down..! If you have an assignment and come in with an idea.. bring 4 or 5... much better prep than most students.. and your teacher will respect it...

call me if you need more help.. I am up WAY too early this morning...
~ the angel*

are you a member of this yet?

Woohoo, I just gave up on my screenplay idea, now I've got 36 hours to come up with a new one. Deadlines blow. I'll have another song lyric story by thursday. That's when my 1000 word short story is due, might as well throw in a song lyric. Maybe Elton John as a tribute to aerosol...