i bet your thanksgiving dinner was super tastey! i give ya props for pulling it off, i think if i were in charge of an entire thanksgiving meal i would fail miserably. and you are all cleaned up too! i think you might be part superwoman
I can't really say that there was a particular thing that I liked; I enjoyed the story as a whole. You were able to build the tension in a manner that made me want to see what happened next, and it was really well done. I'd like to be able to write that way.